Monday, March 07, 2005

Take me out of this moment,
this place in time, and
invite me to our home,
smooth and quiet.
We can take my boat and
float down this milky-white river
and pass the rows of yellow tulips.
I will speak to the raven
overhead and ask him to find me.

Take me to your cobbled streets,
and show me the wide buildings
crowding the shops. Let me
sit in the cool corner
under the giant basil plant.
I want to smell of mint and basil,
so let me bathe in your sun.

I can feel us nearing
the bright, green clearing,
and smell the stones
of the short, wide homes.
I can see the raven calling
and the rain falling.
I am here;
we are near;
I do not fear
anything.

5 comments:

. : A : . said...

Very nice imagery. I particularly liked,

"Take me to your cobbled streets,
and show me the wide buildings
crowding the shops. Let me
sit in the cool corner
under the giant basil plant.
I want to smell of mint and basil,
so let me bathe in your sun."

Thanks for dropping by my blog and commenting.

:..M..: said...

You write well. I liked these the most

"We can take my boat and
float down this milky-white river"

"so let me bathe in your sun."

Like .:A:. has already said, the imagery is good. I'll keep coming :)

Jyotsna said...

I really liked reading this--"I can feel us nearing
the bright, green clearing,
and smell the stones
of the short, wide homes.''and the last lines..such a vivid imagery that it brought it alive for me..gently and subtly
thanks for dropping by my blog and do stay in touch

PoeticMermaid said...

"I can see the raven calling
and the rain falling.
I am here;
we are near;
I do not fear
anything"

These were my favorite lines, for their simplicity in rhyme. I generally do not appreciate forced rhyme, but this was nice.

After reading this, I just felt alive and in the moment. No where else but here...

After reading this, I felt

Pincushion said...

'I am here;
we are near;
I do not fear
anything. '

i loved this ! its simple, poignant and heartfelt. I especially liked the fact that it feels so wholesome, as if one has visited ones childhood..again..!

Thank you for visiting my blog ! I shall surely be back :)

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